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The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australia water consumption for last year.

The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australia water consumption for last year.
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The bar
chart
 illustrates the water consumed by residents in Australia,
while
 the pie
chart
 describes water
consuption
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consumption
 by sector, both during the year 2014.
Overall
, it can be observed that the cities of Perth and Brisbane had the higher consumption,
while
 the city of
Camberra
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Canberra
 had the lowest rates.
On the other hand
, agriculture was the sector with the biggest percentage.
Firstly
, it is worth noting that in the bar
chart
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 the City of Perth consumes an
avarege
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average
 of three hundred
kilolitre
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kilolitres
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 per property during 2014.
Also
, the City of Brisbane had a high consumption rate of about two hundred
kilolitre
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kilolitres
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 per property,
while
Camberra
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Canberra
cosumed
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consumed
 below 150
kilolitre
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kilolitres
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.
Subsequently
, in the pie
chart
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 it can be observed that Agriculture represents
the
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67% of
overall
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 water
consuption
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consumption
,
while
 the other sectors had a
consumtion
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consumption
 rate below 10% of the total.
For example
.
although
 manufacturing consumed just 4%, mining consumed 2%,
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these two the smallest slices of the pie
chart
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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