The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Technological advancements have brought revolutionary changes in various sectors of work including, the police department.

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, many different devices and virtual tracking ways are now available to monitor criminal activities and maintain law and order in any society.

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, as per the given statement, some people believe that there is a reduction in illegal activities from previous times because of the use of advanced technologies

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essay It is important to mention first that with the development of web cameras, trackers, internet-operated or satellite devices and even media networks, certainly, police have

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enough support to hold a criminal. They can chase and catch a crime easily and even locals can report to them in no time. There were no

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methods in the past and so it was very easy for a lawbreaker or a thief to run and hide away.

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, it has some drawbacks too. Cybercrime rates and online bank fraudulents have considerably increased. It has now become very convenient for criminals to

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a misdeed by planning through social media and doing international robberies.

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, people get robbed by thieves just picking up a phone call and recently a well-known newspaper reported an increase of 20 % in

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crime rate in the

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10 years. In conclusion, as explained above,

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modern technologies are a boost for any country to control illegal activities as compared to the past

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, criminals are

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finding new ways through it to conduct a crime and

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I do not fully agree with the given statement.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

284 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

surveillance cameras
advanced security systems
potential criminals
law enforcement
AI (artificial intelligence)
big data analytics
forensic science
public awareness
social media
online platforms
crime prevention
crime rates
counterargument
cybercrime
technological misconduct

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Fully explain your ideas

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