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The chart below shows the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The chart below shows the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
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The chart graph shows the statistics of
magazines
 sold per
person
 in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with expected sales for 2007.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Country
 A and
Country
 B have a higher number of
magazines
 sold per
person
 than
other
Correct article usage
the other
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 three countries between 2003 and 2007.
Besides
,
Country
 E has the lowest number of sold
magazines
 by people in 3 period years. It is
also
 evident that there has been a dipped trend of
magazines
 sold per
person
 in
Country
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Countries
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 A, B and C, and expected to keep declining in the future.
However
, the number of
magazines
 sold per
person
 in
Country
 D is increasing steadily, which projected a rising rate in 2007. It has a different trend with
Country
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Countries
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 A, B and C.
Finally
, in
country
 E, the statistics are not steady over the
3 year
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3-year
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 period. Even though it rose from around 4 in 2003 to around 6 in 2005, it is projected to go back down in 2007
around
Change preposition
to around
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 4.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words magazines, person, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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