The line graph shows the average number of weekly patieents vivsiting four clinics of a hospital form 2010 to 2016.

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patieents vivsiting four clinics of a hospital form 2010 to 2016.
The line graph gives information about the average figures every week of
patients
who visited
hospital
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the hospital
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in terms of four different clinics (birth control, eye, diabetic, and dental) in a six-year period.
Overall
, the numbers of all increased between 2010 and 2016 except for birth control.
While
the biggest number
in
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the end of the illustration was eye
patients
,
patients
went to the hospital for diabetes, and dental clinics were the least. Starting at almost 125
patients
per week, people visiting hospitals because of eye problems gradually raised and reach 350 in 2016.
In contrast
, the figure for controlling birth saw a different trend, it counted the most at first and increased until 2012, followed by a dramatic drop to about 125 in 2014. The
least
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two, diabetic, and dental, still remained the least in the
last
time given. The number of diabetic
patients
climbed steadily in the first year and reach a plateau from 2012 to 2014 and gradually ascend in the end,
Besides
, the figures for visiting dental clinics experienced a rally and creep up to almost 125 in 2016.
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  • line graph
  • average
  • weekly patients
  • clinics
  • hospital
  • trends
  • increases
  • decreases
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • fluctuations
  • comparative analysis
  • time period
  • consistent
  • inconsistent
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • decline
  • rise
  • remained stable
  • notable
  • significant
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