The line graph shows the average number of weekly patieents vivsiting four clinics of a hospital form 2010 to 2016.

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patieents vivsiting four clinics of a hospital form 2010 to 2016.
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The line graph gives information about the average figures every week of
patients
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who visited
hospital
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the hospital
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in terms of four different clinics (birth control, eye, diabetic, and dental) in a six-year period.
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, the numbers of all increased between 2010 and 2016 except for birth control.
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the biggest number
in
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the end of the illustration was eye
patients
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,
patients
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went to the hospital for diabetes, and dental clinics were the least. Starting at almost 125
patients
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per week, people visiting hospitals because of eye problems gradually raised and reach 350 in 2016.
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, the figure for controlling birth saw a different trend, it counted the most at first and increased until 2012, followed by a dramatic drop to about 125 in 2014. The
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two, diabetic, and dental, still remained the least in the
last
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time given. The number of diabetic
patients
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climbed steadily in the first year and reach a plateau from 2012 to 2014 and gradually ascend in the end,
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, the figures for visiting dental clinics experienced a rally and creep up to almost 125 in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words patients with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • average
  • weekly patients
  • clinics
  • hospital
  • trends
  • increases
  • decreases
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • fluctuations
  • comparative analysis
  • time period
  • consistent
  • inconsistent
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • decline
  • rise
  • remained stable
  • notable
  • significant
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