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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.
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The charts provide information on the monthly median temperatures and the amount of hourly sunlight in
London
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, New York and Sydney.
Overall
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, New York (NY) had the most sun exposure and had the highest peak of
temperature
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 than their counterparts. Looking at the bar graph, Sydney had the opposite temperatures than the other two countries. It has the hottest
temperature
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 in January at just above 25
degrees
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, which remains stable until March. The heat
then
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 started to cool down gradually
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 and reaches its lowest point in July at 15
degrees
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.
Nonetheless
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, it went back up steadily until December at 25
degrees
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. Meanwhile, NY had a similar
climate
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 to
London
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 throughout the year.
However
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, it receives more sunlight between the two with 2,535 hours of sunlight. In January, both countries have below 10
degrees
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 of
temperature
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.
Nonetheless
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,
London
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 is slightly warmer with a difference of around 4
degrees
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.
Furthermore
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, from there, the
climate
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 for both places is increasing, with NY surpassing
London
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's
temperature
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 in April.
Furthermore
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,
London
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's
climate
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 continues to warm up slightly, reaching its peak at approximately 23
degrees
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 in July, which is followed by a drop in temperatures in the following months. Meanwhile, New York's
temperature
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 progressively raised and had its highest
climate
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 in July at 30
degrees
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. From here, it cooled down steadily until December.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, nonetheless".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, temperature, degrees, climate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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