Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Humans become the most powerful kind in the world and
such
domination has bad consequences connected with a negative impact on the plants and animals. In this
regard, some people
believe that it's impossible to change the trend of destruction, while
others consider that mankind could make it. In this
essay, I will discuss both sides and give my opinion at the end
.
On the one hand, people
do a lot of bad things for the environment. For example
, we as mankind have too many cars and factories that produce harmful gases and are the reason for too much rubbish in ecosystems, raising pollution. All of these are destroying the habitat of plants and animals. We literally can't do anything with this
in the closest
future. Correct word choice
near
People
aren't ready to significantly change their lifestyles with the purpose of solving environmental pollution. Moreover
, from all over the world in some places cutting forests is continuing. It's decreased
population of all kinds in the natural world.
Correct article usage
a decreased
Nevertheless
, people
start thinking about the future. Today we understand that it's going to be necessary to care about nature. Many programmes try to solve the problem of cutting forests and emissions of CO2. All of them don't have fast results but after around 30 years it will be visible. Also
, today people
start
to recycle rubbish. It's the best way to care Wrong verb form
have started
natural
resources and decrease pollution.
Change preposition
for natural
To sum up
, humans have chances to change the situation on the better side. I believe that we could do this
but there are still many troubles connected with human's
greed. Indeed, the realisation of caring programmes is going really slow. To solve the problem, everyone should understand that nature is an integral part of us and we are still Change noun form
human
in
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
dependency
on it.Replace the word
dependent
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task achievement
The essay does a good job of addressing both views on the topic and providing an opinion. However, further elaboration on the examples can strengthen the arguments. For instance, specifying certain initiatives or agreements could provide more depth.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is fairly good, but some paragraphs could benefit from better transitions and more fluid connections between ideas. Consider using linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your arguments.
coherence cohesion
While the essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, the conclusion could be made stronger by summarizing the key points discussed in the essay rather than introducing a broader statement. Make sure your conclusion ties back to the main arguments presented.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. This structure helps in delivering your message effectively.
task achievement
The ideas presented are relevant to the topic and show an understanding of the issue. This is indicative of careful thought and consideration.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.