In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is true that, the many countries

child

are engaged in

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kind of paid

work

. People

devide

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divide

decide

two groups with

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opinion. Someone say

that is

completely wrong.

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, others consider it is experience and

important

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an important

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thing to taking responsibility. I suppose

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apply

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it is

good

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idea to receive money and help for family,

reletives

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relatives

. There are many

argument

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why

child

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children

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want to

work

. First of all, they have not got full family members. It is

real

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hard to live and they have not got basic foods,

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or clouthes

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clouthes

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clothes

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living

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, if only another

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hardly

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it is hard to buy something for children.

Furtunatelly

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Fortunately

, children start to think about

work

. There are several

variant

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work

for example

, waiters, coffee

maker

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, or voluntary.

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this

kind of

work

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young people take responsibility and

learning

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something new.

Secondly

, nowadays

child

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children

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want

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develop their skills and

achives

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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
44Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

270 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Child labor
Exploitation
Minimum age
Work experience
Survival
Taking responsibility
Education
Poverty
Legal restrictions
Physical toll
Psychological impact
Cultural perceptions
International conventions
Economic impact
Work-study programs
Skilled labor
Unskilled labor
Developing economies
Moral implications
Professional development

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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

The number of tourists visiting Malaysia and Dubai from 1995 to 2003 is presented below.

compare two charts about the average houses price at England

Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

CAR OWNERSHIP HAS INCREASED SO RAPIDLY OVER THE PAST THIRTY YEARS THAT MAY CITIES IN THE WORLD ARE NOW 'ONE BIG TRAFFIC JAM'. HOW TRUE DO YOU THINK THIS STATEMENT IS ? WHAT MEASURES CAN GOVERNMENTS TAKE TO DISCOURAGE PEOPLE FROM USING THEIR CARS?