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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar graph illustrates, by three teams, the
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2002 and 2005.
Overall
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,
team
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B
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 remained at a higher score throughout the whole Ike frame. At the beginning of the period, the
scores
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team
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B
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 spiked to 82pt,
while
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team
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 A and
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 C had less than 10pt. In 2003,
Team
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B
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 decreased by 22pt, but
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team
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 A and C increased slightly to 11pt and 15pt, respectively. Moving on in 2004,
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team
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 A experienced a significant
soaring
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 at 35pt, the
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 of
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B
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 was higher than others, despite dipping
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 43pt and the lowest over the period.
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, the
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 of
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 C decreased to 3pt.
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 of the period, the
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 of
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B
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 depicted
a
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increasing
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 to 55pt,
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,
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B
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 dropped
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 8pt.
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B
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 fell from just over half to only 5pt.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words scores, team, b, pt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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