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The graph shows the export of thousand of cars in Uzbekistan between 2014 and 2019.

The graph shows the export of thousand of cars in Uzbekistan between 2014 and 2019.
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The bar chart illustrates the data about the
export
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 of the number of cars in one country during a five-year period from 2014 to 2018.
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, there were many significant changes during the period.
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 the number of
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 of thousands of
car
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 in A fluctuated wildly, B increased dramatically in that from 2014 to 2018. It can be clearly observed from the chart that the
export
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 of A started at
extactly
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exactly
 200
million
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 in the first year, and
then
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 decreased by 50
million
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 in 2015. After that, it dramatically increased to 275
million
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 in 2016 and there was
an
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slightly
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 decline of 100
million
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 in 2017 before reaching
to
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its peak of 300
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 in the
export
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 of thousands of
car
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cars
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 in the final year. In terms of
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, the number of the
export
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 in B was more than that of A 25
million
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 at the beginning, and had an upward trend between 2014 and 2018 from 225
million
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 in 2014 to 325
million
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at the end
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 of the period.
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, there was a
slightly
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 decrease to 200
million
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 in 2016.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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