The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The data illustrate how the content of consumption every week from families in one country change in 1968 and in 2018. Primarily, the numbers of housing, transport and
leisure
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increased,
while
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other dropped except the figure of household
keep
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keeps
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stable, at 8.
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, the percentage of food was the highest in 1968, before it dropped to 17 in 2018.
By contrast
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, the proportion of
leisure
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dramatically climbed from 9 to 23 during the five decades and became the main cost in 2018. Meanwhile, the numbers of fuel and power and personal goods were the least(9),
four fold
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fourfold
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as less as that of
leisure
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. At the same time, the proportion of housing and transport rose twofold from 1968 to 2018.
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,
it is clear that
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the percentage of food was the highest in 1968,
while
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that of
leisure
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was the biggest in 2018.
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, the figure
of
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for
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household goods remained stable.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leisure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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