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The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graphs show how much money a family from the USA spend on food, gas and clothes in a four months period, in 2010.
Overall
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,
while
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 in January and ,
March
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 the biggest sum of bills was used on food, in February and April clothes represented the category in which families invested the highest amount of money.
According to
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 the graph, between January and February, people started spending more cash on food , from around 500 dollars to nearly 600.
Also
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, in
this
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 period they started spending more on sportswear, from over 200 dollars to more than 550 , and
nevertheless
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 consuming less gas. From February to
March
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 the
overall
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 spending grew to over 400 dollars , making
March
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 the most expensive month.
Furthermore
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, between
March
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 and April, USA people started wasting more than double the amount of cash on clothes, making April the month with the highest waste in
this
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 category.
Moreover
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, gas consumption has increased and foodstuff has decreased.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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