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Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

#someone #luck
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Throughout history, human beings have had a desire to become successful,
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, when someone attains his/her goals, a question may arise, whether the
success
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 is because of
luck
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 or not. I tend to think it is not only about
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. There are a lot of reasons behind the
success
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. Psychology speaking, individuals should have great passion and self-confidence to achieve their goals.
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, they should be responsible and hardworking. New research shows,
people
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 who try to boost their abilities on a regular basis and who learn new skills to combine them in a creative way, are more successful. Apart from that, in the modern world, building a network is so essential. Having  interpersonal skills offers  more opportunities in
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, some
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 claim that
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 is an integral part of
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, but it remains to be asked, what kind of
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 have
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 belief. I think
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 who are lazy tend to think the
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 of others is a result of
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. Actually, it gives them a strong reason to not work hard in
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 regard. It is obvious that those
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 who gain their goals just by
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, lose them after a
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 because they are not able to maintain them or achieve more. All in all, it is not easy to be successful, there are a lot of factors,
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 as talent, passion and different skills, that should not be neglected. From my perspective, if someone achieves
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 by
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 he/she loses it in the short-distance future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
  • efficacy
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