The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
bar chart provides information about the
percentage
of
people
who were born in
Australia
and outside
Australia
living in urban, town and rural in 1995 and 2010. Units are given in
percentage
.
Overall
,
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
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are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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living in
cities
between
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apply
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born in
Australia
and outside
Australia
has the highest
percentage
through
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from
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1995 to 2010,
while
living
Correct pronoun usage
those living
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in towns and rural
areas'
Change noun form
areas
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statistics are fluctuating
through
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over
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the year. As can be seen from the chart in detail, in 1995,
people
who are living in
cities
and who were born in
Australia
and outside
Australia
figured out nearly over
than
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apply
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50% and reached the highest number.
However
,
people
who reside in towns have the lowest
percentage
, at least under 20%, which figured doubled down than
cities
'
percentage
. In 2010,
people
who are living in
cities
and who were born in
Australia
and outside
Australia
also
figured out the highest
percentage
and numbers are
grown
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growing
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up, nearly over
than
Change preposition
apply
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60%.
Whereas
, the towns and rural
areas'
Change noun form
areas
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people
's percentages have declined than before, which reached less
then
Replace the word
than
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20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, australia, cities with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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