You and your friends ate a meal a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and servise.

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I hope

this

letter finds you in radiant health and the best of

spirit

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spirits

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. I am writing

this

letter with the crucial purpose thank you

some

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apply

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Yesterday was my

birthday

. That's why I celebrated my

birthday

in your cafe with my friends. It's been a long time.

This

birthday

was more enjoyable than the previous ones. On the one hand , the first and

important

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most important

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thing which should be mentioned is that My

birthday

was better than others because your cafe provides good customer service. My friends are jealous of me. On the other side of the coin, The staff of your restaurant provide good service and the food is delicious. I especially liked the decoration of your restaurant, the

colorful

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bubbles and the music.

This

music was really catchy and me and my friends danced to it. Thank you for that.

Finally

, having given the

preverious

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facts, I hope

this

message reaches you and you are a grateful boy. Yours faithfully, Sarvinoz

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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163 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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