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Some people think that governments should pay for health care and education, but others believe it is not government’s responsibility. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #governments #health #care #education #government’s #responsibility
Having the accessibility of basic
human-needs
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human needs
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 is everyone's right.
While
 some
people
 believe medical and educational services need to be funded by the government, others opine it is not necessarily required. I agree with the former point of view because
availability
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the availability
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 of
such
 free services can undoubtedly enhance the
quality-of-life
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quality of life
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 of citizens. On the one hand, those
who
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whom
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asset
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assert
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 that the government is not
obligatory
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obligated
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 to bear the cost of health care and education may believe that it is a self-responsibility of one and all.
This
 is because available benefits of maintaining
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle and pursuing studies are
self-centered
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self-centred
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 and
hence
, it is required to afford the financial burden by
people
 with themselves.
However
, I believe it is not
favorable
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 for everyone,
in
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particularly, those who are
less-privileged
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less privileged
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 and potentially make them suffer from illness and literacy
result
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 in an unhappy life.
On the other hand
, those who advocate in
favor
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favour
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 of government-funded healthcare and education illustrate
that
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apply
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the capability of enhancing good living standards of
people
.
This
 implies that having cost-free access to medication and achieving academic prospects significantly improve both
physical
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the physical
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 and mental well-being of many individuals facilitating a quality way of living. Free education,
for example
, allows students to learn despite their social status and financial instability. Eventually, those are qualified to own an occupation with a handsome salary and prosperous life. I agree with
this
 viewpoint as it can potentially benefit everybody
similarly
 in a country and excel their lives in a positive direction. In conclusion,
although
 it is reasonable to make
people
 afford their own medical and educational
cost
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costs
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 individually, allocating funds for those services by the government facilitates
it
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apply
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more
accessible
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accessibility
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 and
efficient
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 for all and
therefore
 it is
more
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apply
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paramount.
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