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The media has become too influential in people’s lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Media
 as a brunch of journalism, performs effectively almost in most parts of our life. It affects significantly to our daily lives,
as well as
 it is considered an adverse phenomenon.
Although
 there are a few negatives associated with
this
 tendency, I feel that the possible benefits would be far more considerable. To introduce, in a current day scenario we face with advertisements wherever we go,
thus
 it impacts our decisions and thoughts,
repectively
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respectively
. To exemplify, an individual has
old-fashioned
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 phone,
as well as
has
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lack of budget to replace it new one,
while
 ads which may be shown on the ways, in social
media
 and on TV would
drawn
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 in person's
attentive
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.
On the other hand
, turning to the positives, people used to make a great effort to be successful in their career in the previous years,
while
 it is by far easier with just a few clicks. In
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, those who want to become popular may use beneficial sides of kinds of
media
.
For instance
, nowadays, owners create announcements to depict their business through social
media
 apps,
such
 as Facebook, Instagram,
Youtube
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 and it provides them
a
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great number of auditory. To summarize, the drawbacks of
public
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 press would appear less significant than the potential possessions.
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  • influential
  • negative development
  • opinions
  • perceptions
  • unrealistic standards
  • ideals
  • manipulate
  • distort
  • information
  • addiction
  • dependency
  • privacy
  • valuable
  • entertainment
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