A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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people
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, it appears to me that
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are now judged based on their social status and work possessions. I will be sharing my own opinion
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do indeed judge a person depending only on shallow basis,
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their backgrounds, are they well educated?
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do they have a prestigious job?
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to questioning their current spouse. Even though being a
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society is a great thing,
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still do not consider it to be the only way to judge a person. Just because someone owns a great business, or if they belong to a family with great wealth, that does not make them anything special. and
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exactly the old-fashioned values. I respect the
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worth comes mostly from being kind, generous and most importantly trust worthy. We see now that a lot of
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who work with sophisticated and
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society members are really struggling
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because it appears that those respected
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are nothing but humans with no morality, and are far away from being humble. It is true that the old
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immoral
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cannot be compared to our modern community members, for they are far worst. In the end,
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will not say that having a nice possession in our society is a bad thing,
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I am really convinced that
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is not the right way to judge ones worth. One should be humble, honest and shall never lose morality.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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