More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is positive or negative?

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Previously,
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the lack of advanced
technologies
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there was no concept of working at
home
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. People used to travel to their offices and
work
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there.
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, with the help of advancements
obsevred
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observed
in technology,
it
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has made
work
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from
home
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very simple and easy and now there is no more need
of
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any employee
visitng
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visit
there
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office
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, they can perform all
there
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their
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tasks at
home
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. Companies have taken big advantage
out
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of it. They are motivating more and more employees to
work
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from
home
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to get their burdens reduced. In my perspective,
this
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is a very positive change and brings more
oppurtunities
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opportunities
. In
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essay,
i
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will
brief
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over
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my point of view
supprting
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supporting
with
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examples. We observe that
,
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work places
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workplaces
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such
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as web development company, graphic designing organizations, etc,
requires
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our skills more than our degree. For that
reason
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they hire anyone who can get their
work
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done in much effective way possible.
This
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is why
instead
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opening a whole
office
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and paying its rent and
then
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hiring people from near. It is much more easy to open an
office
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from your
home
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and hire people remotely and whenever any project comes forward it to your employees and get your
work
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done. No worry about
office
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rent, electricity bill, and other expenses.
For instance
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, SM360, a very popular games developing place, literally has no
office
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of their own. All
there
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their
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staff works online and
recieve
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receive
as well as
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deliver all their projects online. Other than
the
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salaries there is no other expense of them,
thats
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that's
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why they are making 30%
nore
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more
profit than their competitors. In conclusion, I will say that if a company can go online and know they can perform their activities online. So, they shouldn’t hesitate at all and shall for it at that moment and will see
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sudden increase in their
in their
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profits.
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