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With the proliferation of technology, the world has become a global village. For the past 10 years, the trend of travelling to another nation for spending vacation or expanding business is inclining drastically. In my opinion, there are two major reasons
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 the positive growth of international travelling including affordability and globalization. I feel that it is a positive development as it allows a
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 to generate revenue. To start with, foreign trips are no more expensive.
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 tourism, deals with high competition, in order to attract new customers,they offer luxurious experience at a modest price, as the cost of travelling is getting inexpensive,
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 prefer to enjoy their vacation in another
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. Nations like Bali, Vietnam,
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, cost less than five hundred dollars per person for a three days trip.
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, globalization is another reason which is resulting
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 expansion
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 overseas travelling.
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 are more aware
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 different destinations, cultures and leisure
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 around the world. The Internet is a prominent example as a person can find tonnes of information about the place where he wants to visit. Clearly, the affordable trips and the information exchange between the several nations is resulting
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 in the international tourism industry. In my opinion, the increase in aviation travel works in favour of a nation's economy. Tourism helps to grow new businesses which generate new jobs for
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. If more tourists visit a
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, there will be better employment opportunities for those who work in industries like food, transportation and hospitality. Maldives and Thailand are one of those countries whose GDP mostly depends on
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tourism
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, focusing on developing
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international travel
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 favourable
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. In conclusion,
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 essay discussed how cheap prices of international trips and globalization are encouraging
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 to visit another
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 for spending their leisure time and discussed my view
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 it is logical to let
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 industry grow.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fulfillment
  • personal goals
  • happiness
  • career milestones
  • professional development
  • financial independence
  • security
  • philanthropy
  • contribution
  • personal development
  • recognition
  • work-life balance
  • self-improvement
  • well-being
  • subjective
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