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many businesses today are run by family members. Do the advantages of a family-run business outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has been observed that family members can enhance the business. there are myriad benefits
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 drawbacks of family-based
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 my perspective, I believe that the disadvantages outweighed the advantages, because the family are a major sector of any improvement, so that, no
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 the person can trust like the family. On the
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 hand, there is the darker side of family
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 collaboration is the conflicts between them for the
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 any different ideas can lead to
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 a result, there may
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conflict between each other. Since each person
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 the family
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work
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 regards his self the business owner ,
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, there is another partner there. because
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 is a human creature.
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, Bomma and Addisa clothes companies, both owners of each company brother and
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own
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 company (Addidas),
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 of conflict between them, they separated immediately. So
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, every person in the family should think a hundred times before taking any decision related to family businesses.
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, there is a brighter side to relatives' business, the foremost
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 that no
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 the individual can trust like his relatives.
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, the other people are suitable for
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 and more proficient,
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 brother or sister is more reliable and trustworthy than
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 the world. and
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 is because the family breed with each other and no
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 can cheat the other.
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, it is impossible to see a brother cheating on his siblings.
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 why it is always recommended to
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 with family since they are the primary motivator and supporters.
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, there are both merits and demerits of family participation in businesses,
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, I believe, the ups outweighed the downs because the family are the best supporters around the world,
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, they are reliable people and never cheat.

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