The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates
estimated
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the estimated
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precentage
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percentage
of male and female
illitrate
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illiterate
individuals who live in dissimilar regions of the earth.
Overall
,
while
South Asia, Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa have the most
illitrate
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illiterate
inhabitants respectively, a tiny minority are not
littrate
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literate
in three other mentioned locations.
Moreover
, it
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should
be noted that the rate of
illitracy
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illiteracy
is much
more
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higher among women all around the world and it might be the direct result of
patriarchy
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domination that can be reinforced by underdevelopment. At first glance,
it is clear that
south
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South
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Asia
have
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the biggest population of
illitrate
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illiterate
dwellers
while
more than half of its
women
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women's
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communty
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community
can not read or write and more than 30% of its men do not have
this
ability.
Furthermore
, the Arabean and African nations occupied the second and third ranks respectively in
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world
illitracy
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illiteracy
literacy
chart with 50%
illitrate
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illiterate
ladies and about 30%
illitrate
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illiterate
men that they have in their societies.
Whereas
10% of males and 20% of females are not able to read or write in eastern regions of Asia, nearly all of
developed
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the developed
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countries
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countries'
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citizen
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citizens
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are
littrate
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literate
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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