in some countries the avrege wiight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fintness are decreasingwhat do you think are the causes of yhese problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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people

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tend to

sedentary

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lifestyle ,

inaddtion

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in addition

they eat a lot of junk foods instate of

nutritous

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nutritious

meals ,

thus

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fat and oil cause

their

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there

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will be

owerwight

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overweight

, I believe

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phenomenon occurs in poor countries.

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essay will note the reasons

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for

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problem

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the problem

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. It is strongly

reccommended

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recommended

that exercising is the best way to lose weight, because when individuals

doing

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sport after that not only do they sweat a lot which is

result

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a result

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what some burn some fat off their body , but

also

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redues

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reduces

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risk of

diseas

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disease

and health problem

sich

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such

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heart

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attack.

Other

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good

effects

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is that

people

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have a

racharge

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recharge

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the

batteris

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batteries

and get

ride

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rid

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of stress and

anxity

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anxiety

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, today's ,

people

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eat

fastfood

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fast food

namely Pitzza, Pasta and Burger instate of

nurtitous

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nutritious

meals ,

unfortunatly

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unfortunately

fastfoods

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fast foods

rich in cheese , spice and oil which are made with

low quality

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ingredient

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as a consequence

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it is really incompatible with health.

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the arguments mentioned above, my point of view is that there are a few ways to tackle

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problem. In my opinion , a sound mind lies in a sound body ,

people

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should have a

balance

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diet and avoid unhealthy food ,

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further more

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furthermore

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everyone chooses one sport and doing it which

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plan must their weekly ritual. I think

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apply

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the goverments

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goverments

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governments

government

should inform

people

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through Tv, radio and social media about

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issue . If everybody is

obesity

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obese

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, they will deal with serious problems which is really dangerous.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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258 words

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in some countries the avrege wiight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fintness are decreasingwhat do you think are the causes of yhese problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Most companies and organizations requires their employees to wear uniforms to work. what are the jobs that need uniform? what are the disadvantages of wearing uniforms to work?