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in some countries the avrege wiight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fintness are decreasingwhat do you think are the causes of yhese problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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There are a number of elements why
people
 tend to
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle ,
inaddtion
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in addition
 they eat a lot of junk foods instate of
nutritous
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nutritious
 meals ,
thus
 fat and oil cause
their
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there
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 will be
owerwight
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overweight
, I believe
this
 phenomenon occurs in poor countries.
This
 essay will note the reasons
of
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for
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problem
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the problem
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. It is strongly
reccommended
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recommended
 that exercising is the best way to lose weight, because when individuals
doing
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do
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 sport after that not only do they sweat a lot which is
result
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a result
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 what some burn some fat off their body , but
also
 it
redues
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reduces
this
 risk of
diseas
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disease
 and health problem
sich
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such
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 as
heart
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a heart
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 attack.
Other
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 good
effects
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effect
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 is that
people
 have a
racharge
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recharge
charge
 the
batteris
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batteries
 and get
ride
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rid
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 of stress and
anxity
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anxiety
.
Moreover
, today's ,
people
 eat
fastfood
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fast food
 namely Pitzza, Pasta and Burger instate of
nurtitous
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nutritious
 meals ,
unfortunatly
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unfortunately
fastfoods
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fast foods
 rich in cheese , spice and oil which are made with
low quality
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low-quality
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ingredient
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ingredients
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,
as a consequence
 it is really incompatible with health.
According to
 the arguments mentioned above, my point of view is that there are a few ways to tackle
this
 problem. In my opinion , a sound mind lies in a sound body ,
people
 should have a
balance
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balanced
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 diet and avoid unhealthy food ,
further more
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furthermore
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 everyone chooses one sport and doing it which
this
 plan must their weekly ritual. I think
,
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apply
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the goverments
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goverments
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governments
government
 should inform
people
 through Tv, radio and social media about
this
 issue . If everybody is
obesity
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obese
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, they will deal with serious problems which is really dangerous.
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