The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The line chart
provide
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data from
2008
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the 2008
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report about U.S energy
consumption
by different forms of fuel since 1980 with prediction until 2030.
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,
it is clear that
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the cousumption
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cousumption
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consumption
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of petroal
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petroal
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petrol
and oil, coal, and
nautral
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natural
gas by
US
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the US
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show
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an increase
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increase
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during
given
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period,
while
renewable
slightly
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change
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. In
addtion
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addition
, the highest
consumption
of energy by
US
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the US
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using
petroal
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petrol
petrosal
and
oill
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will
oil
over
given
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period,
whereas
the least
consumption
utilizing alternative fuel
soruces
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sources
. Looking at
chart
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the chart
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in more detail, from 1980 to 2030 we can see that the highest
consumption
for
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energy using petrol and oil was
from
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apply
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approximately
from
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35 to 50
quadrillion
units
.
In contrast
, from 1980 to 2030
the
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hydropower
show
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the lowest
consumption
from 3 to 2
quadrillion
units
. In
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addition
addtion
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the nuclear
soruces
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sources
thrid
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third
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consumption
from 4 to 6
quadrillion
units
. Regarding coal and natural gas, from 1980 to 2030 coal
show
remarkable
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went up from 15.1 to 32
quadrillion
units
,
whereas
the natural gas
show
flcutuate
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fluctuate
fluctuated
over
given
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period from 20 to 25
quadrillion
units
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, show, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.

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  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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