In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason some people believe that we should spend money now to research other planets, such as Mars. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In the upcoming years, the
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will not have enough land where humans can live comfortably. In order to overcome
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issue, many individuals think that more money should be invested to explore
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like Mars. In my opinion, space exploration is not a good idea to rectify the issue of overpopulation as it is not economically feasible and ethically right. To start with, researching on
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like Mars needs a huge amount of investment.
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is simply because exploring space there are innumerable expenses related to it
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as the cost of manufacturing a rocket, the fuel, the astronaut's suits, and many more. Even
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another
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the same as the
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, numerous things need to be changed like the atmosphere which will be impossible to achieve without a powerful budget.
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, the USA spent more than eight hundred million dollars just to reach the moon. If
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think of creating living conditions on the
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any other
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it will result in economic depression around the world. Clearly,
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the issue of the increasing population around the globe, investigating the universe will result in loss.
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, it is unethical to change other
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' characteristics for their own benefit. As each
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has something unique and those differences make them stand out from each other. In case, humans
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change Mars's atmosphere to make its living conditions the same as the
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, eventually, it will completely vanish the uniqueness of that
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which is not ethical. To illustrate, a person gets uncomfortable when somebody tries to point out his habits, in the same way, the individual does not know how that
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will react to those changes, which a human is trying to change.
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, people should focus on
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to make it a better place
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. In conclusion, I believe that researching other
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will bring
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results not only for humanity but
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for those
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which are being experimented on. Humans should keep in mind that space exploration programs need a significant amount of funding which can indirectly affect the inflation rate on the
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,
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, altering anyone for their own advantage is against the moral values of humanity.
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