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Many countries spend a lot of money in art. Some people think investment in art is necessary, but others say money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both arguments and give your opinion

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 countries around the globe vouch for the expansion of their collection of artistic articles.
However
, those that oppose
this
 notion believe that
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 the funds spent
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such
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arguements
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arguments
,
ere
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, forming an opinion to the best of my reasoning abilities. The distinguished luminaries encouraging the
accumlation
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accumulation
 of artworks
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prods
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 their respective governments to facilitate an
ever growing
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reserviour
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reservoir
 of
art
 pieces in their museum infrastructure. To that end, a lot of wealth is spent on these display pieces. Wealth that would
otherwise
 be used to foster the growth of medical and educational facilities.
Thus
, those who agree with
this
 belief, advocate for
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 the flow of funds going from the meaningless pursuit of
acquireing
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acquiring
 artistic objects to the
nurishment
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nourishment
 of the aforementioned facilities. As
such
, the finances spent
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hospital
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 would allow the medical staff of a medical
center
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 to better equip themselves with state-of-the-
art
 machines.
Moreover
, it will
also
 enable extension of the facility to increase the number of wards to house more patients,
as well as
, establish a properly supplied and stocked pharmacy.
Additionally
, spending finances to improve or reform the education system
as well as
 bringing advancement to the primary, secondary and
tuturary
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titulary
 educational building will improve the
overall
 literacy rate and the quality of education.
Thus
,
this
 approach is rooted in
prudency
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. On the other end, the
art
afficianados
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aficionados
 fortify their case by making statements about the necessities of
art works
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artworks
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.
Such
 as
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 the importance of
art
 in a nation's culture, traditions and history.
Therefore
, they believe that artistic objects are the very backbone of a culture as they represent the cultural values,
life style
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lifestyle
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, customs and heritage.
Moreover
, they say that the native traditions of a country can not be sustained if not for the
existance
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existence
 of
artefects
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artefacts
 to pass
it
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them
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 on to new generations.
Finally
, an object of historical significance is an invaluable thing,
worth
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 of reverence and should be treated with the care and respect worth of a national treasure. For the above reasons, they advocate for the pursuit of
attainment
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 of
art
 so they can be bestowed upon the next generation to teach them
values
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 of their native land.
To conclude
, both sides of
this
 debate hold considerable merit.
However
, I am of the opinion that the supporter of the
art work
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 obtainment holds more weight
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 the opposing side.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vital part
  • culture and heritage
  • attracting tourists
  • promote diversity
  • foster creativity
  • fundamental needs
  • directly impact
  • economic performance
  • productive workforce
  • widespread benefits
  • solid foundation
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