The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data provided in the form of a table compares underground
railway
systems in six different cities
in terms of when they were constructed, killometres
of routes and the number of travellers per year.
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kilometres
Overall
, the underground railway
which was located in London was the oldest and longest underground railway
compared with other surveyed cities. In contrast
, the one in Los Angeles was the newest and shortest railway
transportation system. Additionally
, railway
in the Tokyo was the most crowded metro by far.
In 1863, an underground railway
system was built with a length of 394 killometres
which was able to transfer 775 million Correct your spelling
kilometres
people
per year. The railway
systems which setting up in Paris and Tokyo in 1900 and 1927 respectively, can be used by more than 1000 million people
for at least 155 killometres
. In 1976, only 144 Correct your spelling
kilometres
people
per year use the Washington DC train to travel for a distance of 122 killometres
. The underground train in Kyoto and Los Angeles were
used to transfer almost 50 Correct your spelling
kilometres
people
for a significantly short distance nearly under 30
killometres
.Correct your spelling
kilometres
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