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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data provided in the form of a table compares underground
railway
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 systems in six different cities in terms of when they were constructed,
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killometres
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kilometres
 of routes and the number of travellers per year.
Overall
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, the underground
railway
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 which was located in London was the oldest and longest underground
railway
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 compared with other surveyed cities.
In contrast
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, the one in Los Angeles was the newest and shortest
railway
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 transportation system.
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,
railway
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 in the Tokyo was the most crowded metro by far. In 1863, an underground
railway
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 system was built with a length of 394
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killometres
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kilometres
 which was able to transfer 775 million
people
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 per year. The
railway
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 systems which setting up in Paris and Tokyo in 1900 and 1927 respectively, can be used by more than 1000 million
people
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 for at least 155
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killometres
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kilometres
. In 1976, only 144
people
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 per year use the Washington DC train to travel for a distance of 122
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killometres
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kilometres
. The underground train in Kyoto and Los Angeles were used to transfer almost 50
people
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 for a significantly short distance nearly under 30
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killometres
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kilometres
.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, killometres, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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