In some countries the average weight of people os increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
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weight
of people
who lived in Countries are
increasing and their healthy lifestyle Correct subject-verb agreement
is
are
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is
deduced
. Some Correct your spelling
reduced
people
believed that eating junk food
and having daily chores are the most important problems in this
topic. Also
, some scientists
are looking for solutions. They have suggested having a healthy
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healthy food
a portion of healthy food
food
or taking some time
to doing
sport every Change the verb form
do
day
can lead us to fitting
shape and Correct article usage
a fitting
reducing
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reduce
the
level of health. In Change the word
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this
topic
we will discuss Add a comma
,topic
about
problems and solutions in order before Remove the preposition
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detailed
Conclusion.
In our world, we are Correct article usage
a detailed
sorrunded
by junk Correct your spelling
surrounded
food
and many bad habitats which are caused
increasing Wrong verb form
causing
weight
and losing our body shape. Many Junks
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Junk's
Junks'
food
are
fried Change the verb form
is
by
oil again and again. Because of that many Change preposition
in
people
have high blood Colestrol which can cause of heartattack
. Correct your spelling
heart attack
heart-attack
Moreover
, having bad habitats such
as office jobs, Correct your spelling
heavily
heaily
daily chores and working with Computer or mobile
for Correct your spelling
heavy
along
Correct your spelling
a long
time
in a day
can lead us to gain weight
and we become lazy. If this
lifestyle Continue
for a long Correct subject-verb agreement
Continues
time
, our level of health are
decreased and we may face Some Change the verb form
is
seriouse
problems.
As Correct your spelling
serious
meintioned
before, some Correct your spelling
mentioned
scientists
are giving advice for us to increasing
our Wrong verb form
increase
fittness
and Correct your spelling
fitness
having
a healthy lifestyle. They strongly suggested Wrong verb form
have
to avoid
from fast Change the verb form
avoiding
food
and deduced Correct article usage
the comsumption
comsumption
of Correct your spelling
consumption
food
which has a
high fat. Remove the article
apply
Also
, they said, if people
do sports for thirteen minute
every Change to a plural noun
minutes
day
, they can be in a
good shape and decrease their Correct article usage
apply
weight
. Furthermore
, scientists
said, using mobile
or watching TV in a Correct article usage
a mobile
day
should not more
than two or three hours, They cause Add a missing verb
be more
of
increasing Change preposition
apply
weight
in long
Change the article
a long
time
.
Generally, we must Control
our Fix capitalization
control
weight
to be in a
good Correct article usage
apply
shap
and avoid Correct your spelling
shape
from
Some Change preposition
apply
deseases
which can happen Correct your spelling
diseases
by
increasing Change preposition
with
weight
. We must do sport every day
and listen to scientists
for a healthy life style
.Correct your spelling
lifestyle
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