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In some countries the average weight of people os increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

#countries #weight #people #os #levels #health #fitness #measures
The
weight
 of
people
 who lived in Countries
are
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is
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 increasing and their healthy lifestyle
are
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is
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deduced
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reduced
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. Some
people
 believed that eating junk
food
 and having daily chores are the most important problems in
this
 topic.
Also
, some
scientists
 are looking for solutions. They have suggested having
a healthy
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healthy food
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food
 or taking some
time
 to
doing
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do
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 sport every
day
 can lead us to
fitting
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a fitting
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 shape and
reducing
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reduce
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the
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our
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 level of health. In
this
topic
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,topic
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 we will discuss
about
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apply
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problems and solutions in order before
detailed
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a detailed
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 Conclusion. In our world, we are
sorrunded
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surrounded
 by junk
food
 and many bad habitats which are
caused
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causing
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 increasing
weight
 and losing our body shape. Many
Junks
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Junk's
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food
are
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is
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 fried
by
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in
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 oil again and again. Because of that many
people
 have high blood Colestrol which can cause of
heartattack
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heart attack
heart-attack
.
Moreover
, having bad habitats
such
 as office jobs,
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heavily
heaily
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heavy
 daily chores and working with Computer or mobile for
along
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a long
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time
 in a
day
 can lead us to gain
weight
 and we become lazy. If
this
 lifestyle
Continue
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 for a long
time
, our level of health
are
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is
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 decreased and we may face Some
seriouse
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serious
 problems. As
meintioned
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mentioned
 before, some
scientists
 are giving advice for us to
increasing
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increase
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 our
fittness
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fitness
 and
having
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have
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 a healthy lifestyle. They strongly suggested
to avoid
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avoiding
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 from fast
food
 and deduced
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the comsumption
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comsumption
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consumption
 of
food
 which has
a
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high fat.
Also
, they said, if
people
 do sports for thirteen
minute
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 every
day
, they can be in
a
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apply
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good shape and decrease their
weight
.
Furthermore
,
scientists
 said, using
mobile
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a mobile
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 or watching TV in a
day
 should not
more
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be more
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 than two or three hours, They cause
of
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apply
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increasing
weight
 in
long
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a long
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time
. Generally, we must
Control
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control
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 our
weight
 to be in
a
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apply
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good
shap
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shape
 and avoid
from
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apply
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Some
deseases
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diseases
 which can happen
by
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with
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 increasing
weight
. We must do sport every
day
 and listen to
scientists
 for a healthy
life style
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lifestyle
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.
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