The maps below demonstrate the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since it is construction in 1960.

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the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since it is construction in 1960. Looking from an
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perspective, a comparison of the three diagrams reveals big changes in buildings. In nineteen sixty buildings
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as a hospital, shopping
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, farmland and car park were built. From 1960 to 1980 farmland has been replaced by nursing
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,
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has been replaced by cancer
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park and hospital remained unchanged. From 1980 to 2000 the cancer
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expanded
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territory by completely occupying the nursing school, what about nursing school, it took half the car park. A huge amount of change has taken place in forty years.
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