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The maps below illustrate the changes to the Queen Mary Hospital since it was built in 1960.

The maps below illustrate the changes to the Queen Mary Hospital since it was built in 1960.
The maps below illustrate the changes to the Queen Mary Hospital since it was built in 1960. The map contains four main buildings, a shopping
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, a hospital, farmland and a car park. But in 1980, some changes were made. There,
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 of a shopping
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 located in the upper left corner, they built an oncology
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 and a pharmacy nearby. And
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 of farmland, which is located on the left in the lower corner, a nursing school was built. In 2000, the cancer
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 expanded and already occupied the grounds of the nursing school. The nursing school and the car park on the bottom right had to split the place in half. On the whole, as we can see on these three maps, there is a bigger advantage on the second map in 1980.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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