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More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think is a possible solution?

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Ownership of private automobiles by
people
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 is becoming popular in developing nations.
Vehicles
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 are one of the biggest sources of
pollution
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, contributing to poor air quality and congestion.
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 would lower vehicular
pollution
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 by driving an electric car. It seems that more and more
people
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 are choosing to drive their private
cars
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, which leads to traffic congestion problems. Traffic congestion generates social costs greater than what the individual driver bears, including
fuel
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 costs, time, driver stress, and impacts on both physical and mental health.
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, motor
vehicles
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 are developing countries' largest source of air
pollution
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. Burning gasoline and diesel
fuel
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 creates harmful by-products like nitrogen dioxide, carbon monoxide, hydrocarbons, benzene, and formaldehyde.
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,
vehicles
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 emit carbon dioxide, the most common human-caused greenhouse gas.
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, In Thailand,
vehicles
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 provide about a third of the nation's air
pollution
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. Governments can take action to lower vehicular
pollution
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 by encouraging
people
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 to use electric
cars
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. Electric
vehicles
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 have moved away from burning
fuel
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 and use electrochemical processes to produce the energy required for a vehicle to move. The by-product of
fuel
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-cell
vehicles
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 is water, which is why these types of
cars
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 are known as zero-emission.
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, Battery-and
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 cell-electric trucks and buses are already operating in cities across the United States, and these fleets continue to expand as new models become available. In conclusion, Car ownership is increasing in developing nations, which leads to traffic jams and
pollution
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 problems, so the government should have a policy to encourage
people
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 to use electric
cars
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.
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