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The diagram illustrates the stages in the life cycle of the butterfly.

The diagram illustrates the stages in the life cycle of the butterfly.
The
diagramm
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diagram
 shows the lifecycle of a butterfly.
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, there are 5 stages of
butterfly
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a butterfly
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 which start his life with
egg
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an egg
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 to end up becoming
adorable
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an adorable
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adult
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 butterfly.
The
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In the
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 first step, the caterpillar is grown of egg which
have
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has
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 a huge size
comparing
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compared
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 to
first
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the first
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 shape. There is
chrysalis
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a chrysalis
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 that
caterpillar
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the caterpillar
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 covered itself when he
is eats
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is eating
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 a
lot
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 leaves, so it is the third process of becoming
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adult
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an adult
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itself
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apply
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. After that
adult
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 is emerged out of
chrysalis
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the chrysalis
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 on his own. The final stage turning into
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adult
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an adult
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 individual.
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, the process is tough
,
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 and requires huge
efforts
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effort
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itself
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apply
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, the whole lifecycle takes quite a long and the time varies
of
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for
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 species butterflies.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adult with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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