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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are eouallv important for a country.

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Nowadays, the economies of the countries represent the main feature in order to take the
country
 to the highest point of its development stages. Many governments consider  that  their essential aim is economic
progress
, Yet, in some people's view, other sorts of development are equally necessary for a
country
. I think that it depends on whether they have enough productive people who are capable of taking the economy of the
country
 to a better stage.  In most developed nations, one of the main reasons is their improved economies survive, because of their advantages and their disciplined educational traditions.
Moreover
, they are better at maintaining relations with other developed countries.
Thus
, it causes them to have
such
 dreamed-of economic functions.
On the other hand
, the reputation that
reflect
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with
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the
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economical
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 acts,
basicaly
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basically
it
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is because of being professional at economic
politicions
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politicians
managment
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management
.  Some people
who
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thinks
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 other types of
progress
 are equally essential, which is divided for some particular reasons. One of them is population
nuans
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nuances
, which
it
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has a special role to keep
country
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 in
the
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 way that has an impact on
this
 matter. The
geogographic
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geographic
 location of the
country
 and its condition are another
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 of how it relates to its equal
specialties
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.
Moreover
, the serious ambitions of the
country
 in order to develop it in
the
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 way to have progressive future development is
next
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 considered option that has an important place on
this
 topic.  In conclusion, I think that important goals that take the
country
 to successful stages , sometimes have other types of
progress
 to play a special role or economic
progress
 does the same.
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