in the future , more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. do you agree or disagree

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It is generally believed that people will be reluctant to go to foreign countries for a trip in the future. I tend to agree with those people as every country has a range of special facilities for holidays and you will pay less money than other countries.

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aeroplane

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a family who live in Iran, if they go to PARIS,

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would pay two hundred million

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is not cost-effective for most families.

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, you can find any kind of amusement in your fatherland. supposedly a person who lives in IRAN

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wants to see a museum he/she can choose SHIRAZ or TEHRAN and a lot of ancient cities are witnessed in their land, like ISFAHAN , maybe someone prefers to stay on the beach for the weekend they have access to the north and south seaside of IRAN .

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to another land is

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experience. other

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have their culture which is very amazing for tourists

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trying new food is amazing for anyone. By way of conclusion, it appears to me that going to

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country on

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will decrease every day because nowadays people work long hours to meet the end and they

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extra money to pay for a

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luxury

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it is really boring if you don't understand their language.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

256 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

domestic tourism
international travel
cultural exchange
national pride
affordability
convenience
ecotourism
heritage sites
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in the future , more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. do you agree or disagree

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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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