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in the future , more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. do you agree or disagree

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It is generally believed that people will be reluctant to go to foreign countries for a trip in the future. I tend to agree with those people as every country has a range of special facilities for holidays and you will pay less money than other countries.
to begin
 with , travel to aboard is high maintenance. It is obvious the cost of
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an airplan
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airplan
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aeroplane
 ticket is dramatically increasing,
for
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 a family who live in Iran, if they go to PARIS,
they
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would pay two hundred million
toman
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 for
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an airbus's
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airbus's
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 ticket so
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 is not cost-effective for most families.
moreover
, you can find any kind of amusement in your fatherland. supposedly a person who lives in IRAN
if
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wants to see a museum he/she can choose SHIRAZ or TEHRAN and a lot of ancient cities are witnessed in their land, like ISFAHAN , maybe someone prefers to stay on the beach for the weekend they have access to the north and south seaside of IRAN .
however
 , it can not be denied that
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traveled
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 to another land is
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 experience. other
kingdom
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 have their culture which is very amazing for tourists
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, on the other hand,
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on the other hand
 trying new food is amazing for anyone. By way of conclusion, it appears to me that going to
foreign
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a foreign
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 country on
holidays
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holiday
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 will decrease every day because nowadays people work long hours to meet the end and they
have
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not
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no
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 extra money to pay for a
luxary
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luxury
 trip
besides
 it is really boring if you don't understand their language.
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