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Professional sports person are often idolized by the youth. Some people think that they, therefore, have a responsibility to be role models at all times for children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Professional sportsmen are idolized by the younger generation of any nation. The following passage highlights the relationship between the professionals as role models and their duties towards the country.
In addition
, I would
also
 provide my point of view
along with
 some examples. People from different regions across the world have an interest in various types of sports
such
 as cricket, hockey, tennis, and badminton.
Furthermore
, talking about Pakistan, the crowd is obsessed with cricket and the cricketers. Apart from the elder ones, the younger individuals take the players as a guide or model for themselves. Other than playing games these people have a huge responsibility that they should try to fulfill seriously. I belong to the school of thought that believes idolized professionals like Shahid Afridi, Sania Mirza, and Ronaldo should try to teach and motivate children in becoming good citizens. They may
also
 act as a mentor and make them learn the importance of social duties. They should not only provide guidance on social media
instead
, their duty is to take part in various activities that they think could build a better country.
In addition
, I think the good players should start campaigns to clean up the town.
Moreover
, they should set up fundraiser schemes for the poor people of the country.
In addition
, they should strongly encourage getting an education and focus on benefits through different ways like television programs and radio sessions. Nowadays, the facility of social media is
also
 available for them to regulate their message to the world ,especially their followers. In conclusion, I would say that professional players should act as responsible citizens in order to help the government to develop a strong community.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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