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The amount of drinkable water for people is decreasing. Why is this? What can be done?

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The amount of drinkable
water
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 for
people
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 is decreasing. Why is
this
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? What can be done? The fresh
water
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 in our world becomes less and with time
people
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 will not find a
water
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 source to take what they need. It is important to know the reasons and solutions for
this
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 phenomenon.
To begin
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 with,
water
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 is the most important resource in humans’ lives.
People
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 depend on
water
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 because nothing can be done without
water
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. Some scientists discover that our body contains more than 70% of
water
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,
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moreover
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this
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 percentage says that without
water
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 no life will be on our planet.
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, there are many reasons why fresh
water
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 is not increasing, bad uses of
water
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 and many more. The misuse of
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 with the effect of hot weather and
few
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 rain all these reasons cost decreasing of
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.
Therefore
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, our responsibility is to save
water
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 on our planet by teaching kids in schools how
the
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water
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 is valuable and how to use it in
a
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the
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 correct way.
Also
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 keep making small steps and teaching it to all
people
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, like
close
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closing
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 the
water
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 after you finish.
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, rivers should stay clean. Keep and add more trees so
this
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 will affect the weather in a good way to increase the rain to keep fresh
water
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 available.
To conclude
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, after providing the ideas above,
its
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 recommended that governments and
peoples
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people
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 should cooperate to keep fresh
water
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 on our planet for
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 generation and the next generation by knowing that
water
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 is
backbone
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the backbone
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 of our life.
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