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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects. What are causes? And what will be effected on society?

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The fact that today many
students
 do not choose science subjects is becoming more widespread in many parts of the world .
This
 essay will examine the causes
consequences
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 related to
this
 tendency. There are a variety of different causes for
this
 matter .
To begin
 with that
students
 are not interested because the subject is too dry ……………Details /
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 ……… Another contributing factor to mention is the rather long study time …………. Details /
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 …………………. Unexpectedly, there are some significant effects to be taken into consideration. The first and most important is that society is less
develop
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 than other countries lack
of
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apply
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skilled human
resour
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resources
resource
, must hire
foregn
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foreign
 workers ………….. Details /
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 …………..Another effect no less important is that……………… Details /
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 …….. In conclusion,
students
 do not choose science subjects is a big problem that affects a lot of people nowadays. It’s mainly caused by learning is not interesting and the study time is long . From what has been discussed it is advised that should change the way of teaching and teaching
students
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