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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different oraganisation. Discuss and give your opinion

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Cambridge Official Test 1 The working environment is crucial in our life. The majority of
people
 are willing to
work
 with a peaceful, healthy, competitive and skilful leader.
However
, it is a luxury that many of us can not afford it.
Therefore
people
 tend to change their workplace frequently,
while
 others settle down in one particular place.
This
 essay will discuss the aforementioned issue in detail. Some
people
 stay in one
work
 and have no attempt to change. There are several reasons why they do not want it.
Firstly
, they get accustomed to that environment and it is a comfort zone for them.
Secondly
, individuals get attached to their friends. Workmates get on well with each other, so it would be hard to break up.
Last
 but not least, the facilities that are supplied by a company could be very reasonable Some groups of human beings believe the idea that it is harmful to
work
 for the same company for a
while
. They support the idea that the more challenging the
work
 life is, the more important they observe. Supporters of
this
 thought have a motto: “ Comport kills human beings”.
While
 changing the
work
, individuals may learn a new technique and have a chance to know new
people
.
That is
 why, they opt to change it. All in all, changing the workplace which
people
 used to be in is up to the individual’s priority. Some look for a peaceful, friendly
work
 atmosphere,
while
 others are willing to find improvement and a challenging place to
work
.
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