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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

#people #children #choices #matters #food #clothes #entertainment #society #individuals #decisions
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 own wishes. Other people think that it is crucial for children
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 about differences that affect them. I think that depending on the
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 of them  The option that  allowing them to make their own choices will cause them to be an individual person who is capable to solve the problems that needed solve.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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