Prison is the best punishment for criminals. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement . give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days we can see a lot of criminals on
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newspaper
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who make a lot of
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for
government
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the government
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and harm
humans
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, so I believe that
prison
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good place for criminals.
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, in
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I will explain
that
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why
prison
is so positive for bad
people
.
To begin
with ,
prison
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prisons
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have a lot of advantages to save
humans
from dangerous
people
and make sure
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is
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from them . Some
people
believe that
government
should
punishment
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humans
who did bad station.
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,
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if the city
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not have a legal we can see many victims.
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, if the
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punishment the bad person maybe
this
person will learn from mistakes , And will be a good person. So that
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should punishment is so important for
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did criminals.
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should don not
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to
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make treble.
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,
prison
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bad marks on them ,
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they maybe can not
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job
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easily.
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if they have a job
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will remove him
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the position.
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will face some difficult
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. In the end , I believe that
prison
is the best place for bad
people
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,
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behavior
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will enchase .
moreover
will save
humans
from them.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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