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Many people feel that students should learn from online materials while others feel that it is better to use printed materials. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is a dispute between the advocates of using virtual
resources
 and those who believe in the betterment of using hard copies of educational
materials
.
While
 printed versions of
resources
 are providing convenience for students to learn from, I would argue that online
materials
 are more advantageous as
this
 trend can help the environment and reduce the level of pollution. The proponents of printed
materials
 are often pointing out that using hard copies facilitates the process of learning intellectuals. Papers are more suited for reading or writing and they will not have repercussions
such
 as eye degradation.
This
 is the way people are accustomed to learning and changing, it will disrupt the process of understanding a subject.
Hence
, printed
materials
 are easier for scholars to utilize, and
thus
, better for comprehending lessons.
However
, I believe that using online
resources
 is more beneficial.
Firstly
, it is paramount for the current situation of the environment. Most environmental advocates urge people to lower the consumption of
paper
materials
.
This
 is because cutting trees is still the main fashion of manufacturing
paper
 which can damage the forests and the environment
subsequently
. The less we use
paper
 objects, the better it is for the ecosystem.
Secondly
, ink utilized for printing can be harmful to wildlife and human. The used
paper
 which has been thrown away, if contains ink on it, may intoxicate animals, and would eventually harm humans through hunting.
By contrast
, using online
materials
 can ensure less ink is disseminated in the wild and minimize its damage to wildlife. In conclusion,
although
 many would point out the convenience of using
paper
resources
 and their efficiency in the learning process, I would argue that the environmental hazards of using them outright their benefits; so I would recommend online
materials
instead
.
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