The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
The pie graph illustrates the major causes why agricultural
land
becomes less productive. The table demonstrates these reasons influenced
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regions of the
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world
during the 1990s.
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it is clear that
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reason
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land
degradation was over-grazing,
while
the least
reason
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, the highest region
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by total
land
degraded
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was Europe,
whereas
the least was North America. Looking at
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chart in more detail, we can see the highest
reason
for
land
degradation was over-grazing at 35 %,
whereas
the lowest other
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7%. The third and fourth
reason
was
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deforestation
and over-cultivation at 30 and 28 per cent, respectively. Regarding
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, the highest region affected by
land
degraded
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was Europe including deforestation, over-cultivation, and over-grazing at 9.8, 7.7 , and 5.5 % ,respectively and
also
the total
land
degraded was 23% .
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North America was
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county influenced by
land
degraded at total
land
degraded at 5 per cent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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