Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some

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argue that hardship will bring more valuable lessons for the

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, other

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believe that the experiences have not been hard to bring a lesson. I personally believe that difficulties have more impact on self-development rather than easy ones.

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essay will explain both points of view with some reasons relating to

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topic.

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, to be a human being who will grow every day, sometimes we have to face some difficulties.

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, we

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have many opportunities to experience moderate experiences,

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, we can succeed on some occasions.

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condition does not mean that we can not take the insight to support our

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, Indonesian kids experience that those who became a champion and class presidents have more confidence compared to other students, leading them to bravely face

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challenges.

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, I think that facing a moderate obstacle and becoming successful

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can bring value to the

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On the other hand

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, hardships are not a choice for some

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, but it is obstacles that have to be done.

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, difficulties are more memorable compared to the average.

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those conditions are never easy , some scientists believe

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it more memorable and brings more self-improvement. To illustrate, students who had graduated from high school and

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not accepted to the university on their first try have better academic scores in university after they have been accepted.

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they are

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late to be colleagues, they spend the gap year studying and doing self-improvement which leads them to become better students.

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, I think that the pain to be

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and

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facing

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hardships

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people

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to be better

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, average challenges can support the development of our confidence which is one of the most important characteristics if we want to have a brighter

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. But,

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has become the main factor to motivate

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, especially to do self-correction that can help them to face the next challenges.

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, moderate and hardship experiences are not

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that we can choose, so preparing ourselves and to

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develop ourselves is the key to our success.

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grammar

Work on refining grammar and sentence structure for better readability and precision. For example, the sentence 'some scientists believe that is it more memorable and brings more self-improvement.' has a grammatical error and could be clearer.

structure

Provide clearer transitions between points to enhance the logical flow of your ideas. For instance, the leap from Indonesian kids' confidence to facing moderate obstacles could be connected more fluidly.

examples

Offer more specific and varied examples to support your points, which would strengthen the essay's argumentation. The current examples are good but expanding on them or adding new ones can make your argument even more compelling.

balance

The essay provides a balanced discussion by addressing both perspectives on the topic and clearly states the writer's opinion.

examples

There is a good attempt to use examples to support main points, such as mentioning Indonesian kids and students who had to retake exams.

conclusion

The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and restates the significance of preparing ourselves and continuous development.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

361 words

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