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Historical objects should be bvrought back to the county of origin. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Historical values should be returned to the initial
countries
 which used to own them. I am surprised enough that I received exactly
this
 topic because it is a very important point of view for me and my
country
. I am planning to clarify it in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, I am pretty sure those objects are meaningful for the people of the origin
country
. Could you imagine the
churches
 of the eleventh century and even older that have been preserved up to now? Obviously, they are dear to the hearts of the people living on that land.
For example
, I am from Armenia and my
country
 is one of the most ancient
countries
 in the world other
countries
 alike used to have power and huge territories many centuries ago. At present days it is a pretty small
country
 with a rich historic memory. My
country
 lost not only land but
churches
 and different religious objects most of which are under UNESCO protection. Needless to say that as an Armenian I have the right to demand bringing these treasures back to my
country
 and I will be always dreamed about it. No one else in the world cannot appreciate the sense and soul of these
churches
 as we do. As another example, I can mention lost and destroyed
churches
 after the
last
 war with our enemy
countries
. I believe that
such
 kinds of objects must be protected at least. As another argument, I want to point out that after WW2 many well-known pictures and statues were moved out of the initial museums by fascists. Are all of them returned to their owners? I am not sure. Should they be returned? I trust that they must be returned. In conclusion, I want to say one more time that every
country
 has the right to demand returning its lost facilities because they are part of the history and memory of the
country
.
Submitted by karine.s.kirakosyan on

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