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The graph below show the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below show the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the amount of
fish
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 and some different types of meat
consumption
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 (in
grams
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 per person per week) in a European nation from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that meat
consumption
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 changed over the given period
while
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fish
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consumption
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 was unchanged. There was a significant rise in
chicken
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consumption
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,
however
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, the decrease occurred in
beef
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 and
lamb
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consumption
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. Looking at the information in more detail, around 220
grams
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 of
beef
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 was consumed by European people
while
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 they consumed just over 150
grams
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 of
lamb
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, nearly 150
grams
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 of
chicken
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, and about 60
grams
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 in 1979. In the next decade, the
consumption
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 of
beef
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 and
chicken
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 rose to around 230
grams
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 and 210
grams
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 respectively.
In contrast
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,
lamb
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consumption
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 fell to approximately 130
grams
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, and there was almost no change in
fish
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consumption
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. In 2004,
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chicken
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the chicken
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 was the highest
consumption
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 in Europe at just over 250
grams
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while
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 the
consumption
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 of
beef
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 and
lamb
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 dropped significantly to around 110
grams
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 and around 60
grams
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 respectively.
Lastly
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,
fish
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consumption
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 was stable at around 49
grams
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, consumption, grams, chicken, beef, lamb with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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