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The chart shows the percentage of people who have moved house either in the last 3 years, between 3 to 5 years or not within the last 5 years

The chart shows the percentage of people who have moved house either in the last 3 years, between 3 to 5 years or not within the last 5 years
The chart illustrates the breakdown between
people
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 who have changed address or remained in the same house, with the numbers split between those who have moved within 5
years
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, within 3
years
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 or not moved for at least 5
years
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. Those in their twenties and thirties have less than a quarter of
people
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 living in the same home for more than 5
years
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 and those who moved house three to 5
years
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 back being the highest. Those aged between 40 and 49 had the highest figure for having moved 3 to 5
years
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 ago, with 55% of
people
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 compared to 31% that had moved more recently and only 14% who had not moved in the
last
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 5
years
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. By the next age group, the percentage of
people
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 who had moved over 3
years
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 ago and those who had not moved for at least 5
years
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 were almost the same, with only 17% of
people
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 having moved more recently.
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, it can be seen that there are wide variations in the percentage of
people
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 who move during certain ages.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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