Question: Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

A common saying is Health is Wealth.
Sports
plays
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a major role in the
gowth
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growth
of young
children
. Though it has lots of advantages and
an
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important part of our life still everything in excess is harmful.
This
essay will
enlight
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on both the aspects
about
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its advantages and disadvantages. We all want our
children
to grow well and should be healthy and fit. There is no better way than the
sports
. Kids playing
sports
and their interest in a particular game is the dream of every parent nowadays.
Sports
not
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do not
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help you to stay fit but it
imporves
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improve
your mental health and
help
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helps
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children
to have strong
athelatic
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athletic
personality
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personalities
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. Competition in any field is at
peak
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its peak
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so as in
sports
. Young kids
playing
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sports
doing
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do
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lots of
practicing
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and spend their maximum
time
over there. Spending most of the
time
in
sports
showing
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bad results as well,
children
feeling
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feel
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more pressure and
anxity
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anxiety
to score better.
Childres
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Children
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also
loosing
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interest in their studies as well which is a big worry issue for
the
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parents as well.
For example
, Our neighbour has a kid and plays
cricket
. He is so addicted to playing
cricket
and
spend
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his
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apply
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most of
the
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his
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time
on
cricket
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the cricket
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field though
its
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it's
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good as he is a good player and getting good
achievments
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achievements
achievement
in
cricket
but because of excessive playing his studies are getting affected. There are complaints from his school because of lower
attandance
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attendance
. conc In conclusion,
It is clear that
playing
sports
has many important and positive
impact
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on our life but excessive
practicing
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practice
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and spending more
time
on
field
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the field
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unneccessiraly
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unnecessarily
is not recommended at all. Young
children
should manage their
time
and should make a balance
of
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sports
and study.
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