The diagram below shows the changes of a village in 1995 and now.

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The pair of maps offered here illustrates the layout of a village in the year 1995 and how it is presently.

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, the Coastal Village relied on fishing commerce and has seen improvements regarding the residential areas currently. In the year 1995, the depicted rural

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was divided into three sections by a diagonal road stemming from the northwest and a horizontal road to the bottom of the land. These above-mentioned roads

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formed a junction to the southeast.

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, these roads were adjacent to a few housing units, shops and a strip of a fish market parallel to them.

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, the north-western portion assumed the shape of a right triangle, containing a housing

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the

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opposite it to the east, was dominated by farmland and a forest park, having a minor hotel building to the south.

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, to the south of the aforementioned hotel and across the road stood a cafe.

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, the southern boundary of the settlement met with the sea, with a fishing port built to the bottom edge. Today, the

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has seen remarkable developments regarding the accommodation buildings, evident from the growth in numbers of the mentioned structure to the top left.

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, the farm and the forest is not merged and it is used as a field for games

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as golf and tennis. The hotel to the bottom of it has seen the addition of a car park near it. And

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, the fishing port has been removed.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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246 words

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