You fail your monthly KPI and need to report your work performance. Write an email to your manager: Saying why you fail your KPI in this month Explaining your achievements and your failure Stating your solutions how to hit your KPI next month Try to write a minimum of 50 words

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Dear Mr B, I am emailing
to
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you today to explain
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my KPI
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month
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can be explained that I am a newbie, I don't get familiar with
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work.
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all the team are supportive
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I find out
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work is hard to approach and complete easily in a short time. I've just reached 70
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of work
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, after working with
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, I've known
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to contact and raise my issue and exactly who can help me with my all problems.
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tasks and
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. I promise I'll hit the KPI next
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. Sincerely, Victor
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