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Increasing the price of gasoline is the best way to solve the growing problems of traffic and urbanization Is. How much do you agree or disagree? What else do you think he can do?

#price #gasoline #traffic #urbanization
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 model was prepared by an examiner as a very good sample answer.There is no doubt that
traffic
 and transportation by vehicles will become major problems. Both in cities and on highways everywhere. Solving these problems is likely to be more than just an
increaseSimple
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increase
 in the price of gasoline needs.
While
 it is undeniable that the
use
 of private cars is one of the main increases in
traffic
 and consumption is unlikely to fuel the highest number of drivers for a long time slow down As
this
 policy
also
 affects the cost of public transport, everyone people who
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 to travel on roads are not very popular. But there is another difference
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that can be implemented that will have a great impact on these problems.I think cleaner fuels should be developed to deal with the problem.
This
 technology is currently being used to produce electric cars. It is both quieter and cleaner. Convince the builders and
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this
 new technology will be more planned for improvement, especially in cities.
However
,
traffic
 congestion
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 the type of personal vehicle that people can
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to solve. To do
this
, we have to choose public transport services Improve managers.
For example
, if sky trains and train systems
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underground
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 built in our big cities and regularly controlled,
traffic
 on the roads is regular.decreases significantly. Long-distance train and bus services should be attractive and affordable alternatives
save
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 money on driving your own car for long trips. In the end, I think I will reduce
traffic
 and educate the public About more public transportation and government
use
 of public money to build it has a performance function.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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