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Crime appears to be rising in the most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

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It seems that the crime rate in
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most
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 of the world
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 issue is more noticeable among youth. The roots can have three reasons and a number of solutions are proposed. It’s thinkable that the
increase
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delinquency among young
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 their unemployment.
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 to them for commit
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increase
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 the other underlying factor can be spending time on the
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a good teacher for learning everything and
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, the low awareness of
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, about complications of
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crimes
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 by members of society. Perhaps Some
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 only know the old and traditional methods of delinquency, stealing, found, car crime and murder. They may not find the dilemmas of choosing right from wrong in terms of the law. Turning to possible remedies, if parents
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, youngsters would less face with
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 and criminals in the
countries
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 of the world. So it can be hoped that they will be less in predicaments.
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another possible methods
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, about new schemes of committing
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 and classes for moral principles, it would mend probably. In conclusion, it appears that in
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countries
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internet
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 and the level of
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people
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could
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 be effective. Answers to the problem can be holding
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classes
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 for young
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